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Hey, your writing is pretty nice. The speech is smooth and easy to read. The tone is right and I wish you all the best in your presentation .

Some corrections are made, please read the following:

Good morning everyone, I would like to share a story with you, It is entitled "Fighting for the forest". A young boy nameed Chico earned money by taking rubber off the trees in a forest. He has been doing his job for a long time continuously. However, nobody paid much attention to Chico. They did not know that one day he will become famous because of his bravery.

Chico was not rich, but he always tried his best to protect the forest. He put forth his suggestions to the Brazil goverment many times. Though no one listened to him, he didn't give up. He kept trying again and again. In 1985, he went to the United States and held quite a number of international companigns in the aim of promoting his idea to the world. (In the end, did Chico succeed?... tell more about what happens to him afterqards, auidences always wanna know more...
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I do appreciate what Chico did, he is the type of person who is hornorable and brave and respectful. He never gives up and uses every single opportunity to save the forest. He is very valiant and dauntless.


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