可以幫批改我的英文日記嗎?(好短)

Some classmates and me visited The Joint Publishing with Mr Chan today.

I was overjoy because I could choose a lot of book ,which are my favourite one for the library.

They are all about the Psychology and Philosophy.

when I was choosing the books concentrately, I saw YoYo,She was buying some stationaries,

The total cost of the books was about $8000

Finally, Mr Chan invited us having dinner in fairwood.



Chloe , happy birthday to you !!

I will give you some special gifts for you birthday present.

I think it wont' turn you disappointed

See you later .

I went to Joint Publishing with my classmates and Mr. Chan today. I was very happy to buy my favorite books in Psychology and Philosophy. While looking at some books carefully Yoyo bought some stationeries,too. The items add up to $8000HKD. Finally we all had our dinner in fairwood restaurant and Mr. Chan paid it.

Chloe, Happy birthday!
I am going to give you a special gift, which would not disappoint you, I think.
See you.

1) classmate -> classmates
2) cross out 'to'
3) overjoyed (becoz it is passive form)
4)chose -> choose (present tense)
5)book-> books
6)第二段尾唔知你想講咩...
7) they are all about Psychology and Philosophy.
8) when i concentrated on choosing books, i met YoYo. she was buying some stationeries.
9)the total cost of the books are about $8000
10) at last, Mr Chan took us to fairwood for meal and paid for us.
11)Chloe, happy birthday to you!!
12)i will give you some surprises
13)i think it will not make you disappointed

Some classmates and I visited to Joint Publishing with Mr. Chan today.
I am overjoyed because I can choose a lot of books of my favorite in the library.
The books are all about the Psychology and Philosophy.
When I was selecting book attentively I ran across Yoyo, who was buying some stationary.
The book total about $8000
Lastly Mr. Chan bought us dinner at Fairwood.
Chloe birthday to you!!
I will give you some special for you present.
I think it not make you disappointed

2007-02-05 22:21:38 補充：
Some classmates and I visited to Joint - Some classmates and I visited Joint