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Good morning every one, today our group is here to talk (about the short stories taught in the didactic lessons). First of all, let us define didactic. Didactic is a term used to describe a narrative or other work of art ( to ) teach a specific lesson, convey a moral or inspire and provide a mode for proper behaviour.

In the story of “Stone”, (it highlighted) wars are crude, brutal (and may change one's life entirely). (As a result), we (have to keep peace among ourselves). The author’s father seemed to be mad after the war( as we are told) in the story that “Our father had (tried) to kill our mother with a hammer."

I am convinced that when a child (sees his dad murder his mum), he must be extremely frightened and may affect his (psychological developement). Moreover, the story (further depited the father abused the author and) stated that “then he dragged my covers and threw me onto the floor”.

I can’t imagine how my heart will be broken if my parents abuse me like that. But can you image a father, who loves his family before the war, wants to kill his wife and his son after he (comes home)? Is it because he doesn’t love them anymore?

The answer is certainly (NOT) ! The reasons are he felt great shame (as) he (was dismissed from) the army and he couldn’t (forget many people were killed during the war). Not only his enemies, but also his friends in the army and other innocent people.

Every time he (remembered the episodes of ) their death, he (became) crazy and he (didn't know) what he (did would) hurt his sons. This tragedy will happen on many others families when wars occur. The only way to stop this happen (again) is to (keep peace).

In the romantic story of “Orpheus and Eurydice”, the didactic lesson is that Orpheus disobeyed the gods who gave him a second chance to be with Eurydice, but it is told in the story that “…Orpheus, in a moment of forgetfulness, to assure himself that she was still following, cast a glance behind him”. He was told “Do not look back” but eventually he looked back. The consequence was a reversal of Eurydice’s salvation.

The story let us know that there is something we can’t forget or disobey (or else) we will be in big trouble. Just like our Eng4U assignments, don’t forget it unless you don’t want to pass the course. Thank you for your attention and this is the end of our presentation.

? Balance of the stories
? Consistency of tenses

2007-02-01 13:12:15 補充：
Flow 1. Introduction: greetings, define "didactic", mention the names of the stories2. "Stone"3. "“Orpheus and Eurydice”4. Conclusion: what have you learnt from the teachings of the stories in the didactic lessons. What's re your feelings?

Good morning every one, today we will talk about the didactic lessons in the short stories. First of all, let us define didactic. Didactic is a term used to describe a narrative or other work of art that meant to teach a specific lesson, convey a moral or inspire and provide a mode for proper behaviour.
[Nice beginning]

In the story of “stone”, the didactic lesson is that wars are crude and brutal. They may change someone entirely, therefore we need to keep the peace. The author’s father seemed to be mad after the war. It is told in the story that “Our father had try to kill our mother with a hammer”.
[Change {mad} to insane or mentally ill. Mad can also mean angry, which is not what you mean]

I am convinced that when a child sees his dad wants to murder his mom, he must be extremely frightened and may affect his growth after that. [Too clumsy, and the second sentence lost the structure: I believe when a child witnesses his dad attempting to murder his mum, he must be extremely frightened. Such experience may affect his future growth.]

Moreover, the story state[s] that “then he dragged my covers and threw me onto the floor”. [And then? Say it out loud and clearly: such physical abuse would only hurt the child more deeply.]

I can’t imagine how my heart will be broken if my parents abuse me like that. [I cannot imagine how heart broken I will be if my parents abuse me like that]

But can you image a father who loves his family before the war, wants to kill his wife and his son after he went back home? Is it because he doesn’t love them anymore?
[Nice]

The answer is certainly NO! The reasons are he [feels] great shame because he [was] kicked out by the army and he couldn’t forgot what had happened during the war[.] During the war, many people died [either are dead or died, not {are died}], [including] not only his enemies, but also his friends in the army, and other innocent people.

Every time he remember[s] their death, he becomes crazy and he doesn’t know what he is doing will hurt his sons. This tragedy happens to many other families as a consequence of wars. The only way to stop this from happening is to keep the peace.

In the romantic story of “Orpheus and Eurydice”, the didactic lesson is that Orpheus disobeyed the gods who gave him a second chance to be with Eurydice, but it is told in the story that “…Orpheus, in a moment of forgetfulness, to assure himself that she was still following, cast a glance behind him”. He was told “Do not look back” but eventually he looked back. The consequence was a reversal of Eurydice’s salvation.

The story let us know that there is something we can’t forget or disobey, otherwise we will be in big trouble. Just like our Eng4U assignments, don’t forget it unless you don’t want to pass the course. Thank you for your attention, and this is the end of our presentation.

[Pretty nice second part. Good luck!]

"Didactic is a term used to describe a narrative or other work of art that meanS to teach..."

"I am convinced that when a child sAW his dad TRYING to murder his mum, he must be extremely frightened and THIS may affect his growth after that."

i think the tense should b simple past for the verbs about the story

"He was told NOT TO look back but eventually he DID. "

i love the gag at the end ^^