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Nowadays, in Hong Kong, many people like eating in restaurants.
-> A lot of people in Hong Kong like to eat in restaurants nowadays/these days.
(a little reversing makes it sound better)
It is because that there is a wide of variety of dishes, they can order whatever they like and they can go to restaurant in any time.
-> It is because these restaurants serve a wide variety of dishes and people can order whatever they like and they can go to any restaurants at any time.
(this is ok...)
It seems that eating in restaurants is more convenient than eating at home.
-> It seems like eating in restaurants is more conveninent than eating at home.
(ok...)
However, in my opinion, it is not only a waste of time and money, but also it is unhealthy.
-> However, in my opinion, such an action is not only a waste of time and money, but it is in fact very unhealthy.
(this is ok...)
In fact, the dishes in restaurants are not so clean and fresh.
-> As a matter of act, the food served in restaurants are not as clean and fresh as one would think.
(use food because a dish may mean the dish you use to serve the food... clean dish implies they havent wash it and then put food on it)
No matter how beautiful and delicious the dishes, you never know they how make it.
-> No matter how beautiful the dishes look or how delicious the food tastes, you would never know how they prepare them in the kitchen.
(use dish and food to create some variation in your sentences)
The most important is that restaurants are not a responsible to keep your health.
-> Most important of all, these restaurants are not held responsible of your own heath.
(a little adjustment in this one)
They may add a lot of oil into their dishes without thinking.
-> They may add a lot of oil and MSG (味精) without considering their customer's health.
(I added MSG as well because restaurants put a lot in their food)
Do you want to spend your money on their unhealthy food?
-> Do you think you would want to spend money on eating unhealthy food in these restaurants?
(this is ok, I put in my suggestion)
On the contrary, if you eat at home, you can promise that the food is fresh.
-> On the contrary, if you eat at home, you can guarantee that the food you use is fresh and clean.
(promise is a bit strange, use the word gurantee)
How to make it you know.
-> You would know how you prepare and cook the food yourself.
(your sentence is fragmented so I rewrite it)
In addition to, you can save a lot of money because it is well-known that eating in restaurants is very expensive, moreover, eating at home you will keep a better relation with your family. Your home is a place you and your family to life together.
-> In addition, you will be able to save a lot of money because it is a fact that eating out in restaurants costs a lot more than cooking at home. Moreover, having meals at home will promote a better relationship with your family because your home is a gathering place in which you and your family live together.
(I separated and combine the 2 main ideas)
Eating at home is essential.
-> Therefore, eating at home is essential/encouraged.
(conclusion point)
For this reason, I think eating at home is much better than eating is restaurants.
-> With the above reasons, I believe that eating at home is more advantageous than eating out in restaurants.
(I think the ending sounds better like this)
參考: myself, living in the US for 8 years...