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We have received the corrected information you faxed.
And $100 will be charged for adding two more people on the list.
Due to the ammendment, the service will be available once we have received the payment.

Your fax requesting to change certain information is duly received.

A deposit of HK$100 is required for the addition of two signatories.

Given the adjustment,

The service will be in effect upon receipt of the required charges.

We have received the corrected information you faxed.
And $100 will be charged for adding two more people on the list.
Due to the ammendment, the service will be available once we have received the payment.

我地已收到你的更改資料fax
如果要增加兩個人名需要$100按金
由於調整關係
當我地收到正確的費用時...該服務會立即生效

We have received changes to your information via fax.
A deposit of $100 should be paid in advance if this is needed to add two names on it
For the correct adjustment, the service will take immediate effect once we receive the right amount of the charge.

2007-01-31 15:24:28 補充：
[Correction] A deposit of $100 should be paid in advance if it is needed to add two names on it.

We have received your fax request to update your information. Adding two names will incur a deposit of $100. Once payment is received in full, the service will take effect immediately.

我地已收到你的更改资料fax
如果要增加两个人名需要$100按金
由于调整关系
当我地收到正确的费用时...该服务会立即生效

私は土がもうあなたを受け取ったのは資料の fax を変更する
もし需要が名が二人が増える $100 金を押す
ため関係を調整する
私の土がなって正しい費用を受け取る時に ...サービスするべきだ##てすぐ発効する

My ground has already received you to change data fax
If want to increase two personals to need$100 press gold
In order to adjusting a relation
When my ground receives right expenses...Should serve and will take effect immediately

We have received your fax with regarding to the change of information. A charge of $100 is required should you need to add two additional names and the change will be effective when we receive the payment.