請幫我改下grammer同點寫靚d? thx!!!!!

It is my dream to study degree, and I'm grateful that I get the chance now.

I am taking higher diploma now which covers subjects such as accounting, principles of management, business economic, financial information analysis, E-commerce. I believe these relevant knowledge and skills I obtained will aid me in advancing to degree level.

I have confidence that I can complete the degree programme.

1. wrong usage of article.
First, I just want to ask whether the passage is a paragraph of your essay? if your answer is yes. that's ok. if no, there is a problem at the beginning, Studying 'the' degree.
You must use 'a' if one is used first time in your paragraph. If you want to emphasize the degree that you want to apply, you can say, Studying the xxx degree is my dream.

2. Wrong sentence.
I have the relevant knowledge and skill about the programme since the higher diploma that I study now such as accounting, principles of management, business economic, financial information analysis, E-commerce, etc.
you must use a clause or a time period. after "Since ". it's quite strange that 'since ' follow a noun only.
So, I may change your sentence.
i.e. In the high diploma, I study accounting, principles of management, business economic, financial information analysis, E-commerce etc. I can learn the relevant knowledge and skill about the programme from them. That can equip me to the future study in this degree.

From my memory, "such as" seems not to use with "etc". I am not confirmed now. hehe, sorry.

After reading your passage, I guess this is a letter or one of corner of your applicant to one university. the passage is not very convicing. you can write it affirmatively. For example, you can change your last sentence. i.e. I am confident that I can get a result of distinction for this program.


i hope this can help you. good luck.

It was my dream to study the degree course and I am so happy to achieve this hope now. Since I studied accounting, principles of management, business economic, financial information analysis, E-commerce,... etc in my last diploma course, the relevant knowledge and skill I learnt enhance my confidence that I am sure I can complete my degree course.