可唔可以幫我批改grammer牙 ?! 唔該 哂 =]

I stayed at home all day today. I tried to revise for the coming HKCEE maths exam by practising MC (multiple-choice) questions. I was fairly disappointed though, because I failed to understand most of the questions. I found them very difficult and I could not solve them. So I gave up and did other things to aviod such failure.
After awhile, I repented when I was thinking of my parents. They have great concerns for my academic results (development 比较好); they would be very anxious / worried (frustrated 不太能表达关怀之意) if they saw me losing my hope.
All of a sudden, my spirit was up and I could go back and challege/ face those difficulties again!
(OR All of a sudden, my spirit was up and I knew I could study hard again!)


1. revise 用在这里绝对没问题的！ revise = 【主英】復習功課[(+for)]
2. though 在这里的用法相对于 but, however，但就比较 casual，适合用于日记写法。
3. 在过去式里，不能用现代式 cannot， 要改用 could not。
4. 在 cannot / could not 后面加动词 (eg: solve) 是不用在动词前加 (to) 的。
5. I USED to give up 的 used 是代表我以前的做法是放弃，但现在 ... ...。 跟您想表达的不一样。 您想说的是：我就放弃了，之后我就 ... ...
5. ... ... and DO other things ... ... 的 do 凡的错跟 4 一样。
6. failure 后面大可不用加 I (have) just met.
7. repent 后面是加 for ，不是 of 的。还有，repent 的过去式是 repented。不用加 for it 也可以。
8. 不明白什麽是 a spirit of fevor，所以我用了别的词来代替。

2007-01-28 10:47:19 補充：
Line 4: ... ... to AVOID such failure. 串错了， sorry！

2007-02-02 09:04:32 補充：
Re: 咁會唔會好d ! ?? 几o吾错！ 但系 I felt fairly frustrated 的 felt，不是错， 但很少这样子说。 我明白您想表达 [我觉得...] ，但 I was fairly frustrated 已经足以啦！ eg: I was upset 跟的是 adj， 所以用 am/is/are/was/were 就足够啦。但：I feel /felt (that) no one understands me at all!跟的是 noun/phrase/participle (no one)，所以当您想表达 [我觉得...] 就要用 feel 啦。

2007-02-02 09:05:22 補充：
Re: 咁會唔會好d ! ?? (2)我不确定 ...which I found them very difficult. 是不是不正确。但我会写： ... which were very difficult / ... which I found very difficult.因为 which = the subject (ie questions = them) 所以不用加 them 了。

2007-02-02 09:12:34 補充：
Re: Finally ...1. turnED to do other matters in other to avoid facing such failure.直接用 ... and did other things in ORDER to ... .2. After awhile 的 a 和 while 是连在一起的。 3. repented 后面不用加 for it 咯。

2007-02-02 09:15:36 補充：
Re: I knew that ...Either: ... and urged me to study harder!Or ... and I urged myself to study harder!

I stayed at home for the whole day to prepare for coming HKCEE mathematics multiple choice questions.
Those complicated problems which I have not able to solve made me very frustrated.
I finally gave up and turn to do other matters in order to avoid facing those challenges.
After a few minutes, my parents came to my thoughts, who have great expecation to my academic performance. I know that they will be greatly disappointed if they saw me giving up. This thought gave me another drive, and urged myself to study harder.

Anthony

p.s. I am trying hard to stay with your original passage. Keep sentences simple will help you improve. 你寫嚟做咩嘢呀?

2007-01-28 01:02:05 補充：
你編文主要有兩個問題. 1. Logic structure 運用吾熟. 例如 revise 用得吾正確. 後面講 practising, 即係練習, 先前又點各revise 修改呢? logic 吾正確! 又例如 I used to... 我習慣. 同一句後面講 I just meet (met) 剛剛見到. logic 有少少偏差. Just met 係 specific 的情形意思. Used to, 係一般情形... 前後意思偏離咗D.

2007-01-28 01:02:39 補充：
2. tenses 的問題: .... just meet (met); qustions which is (are); cannot to (be) solved; will be very frustrate (frustrated); came from (to) my mind;努力呵... 睇多D電視新聞同報紙. ... 加油!

Today, I stayed at home for a whole day. I tried to revise Maths for the coming HKCEE by practising the MC. However, I was fairly disappointed because I found lots of questions which were very difficult and i coudn't solve them. I used to give up and do other things to forget this failure. After few minutes, I repent of it, I thought about my parents, who had high expectation on my academic results, would become very frustrated when they knew that I was giving up. So I made up my mind and continue with my studies!