英文周記之第2段.....唔該幫我睇下文法有冇錯....唔該

I am going to have six examinations two weeks later. During the coming holidays, I will have lots of homework to do, at that time I will be busy doing homework rather than playing computer. Although I cannot play like other people, I am very happy, too. Also, the 2007 lunar New Year is coming soon, I want to wish every one have a "Happy New Year".

Since six exams are coming up in two weeks, I cannot play on the computer. In this holiday, I have a lot of homework and exercises to complete. Even though I have so much work, I played, and I am very happy. In a few days, the year of 2007 will arrive, so I wish everyone Happy New Year.

- After two weeks, I will have six exams.
[This is fine, but you can get rid of the I by saying: Six scary exams are approaching two weeks later.]
- So I can't play computer.
[When? Now? Or cannot play two weeks later? And please say {play computer games}, not {play computer}]
- In this holidays, I have a lot of homework and exercise.
[Tense is wrong, change {have} to {had}, use past tense.]
- Although I was play, I am very happy.
[First the tense is wrong, Second, this sentence does not make sense. Although XXX should be something that should not make you happy. Rewrite it.]
- After some days, we will go to 2007.
[This is fine.]
- So I hope all the people "Happy New Year".
[{all the people} can be replaced by {everyone}. When saying Merry X'mas or Happy New Year, we usually use {wish}, not {hope}. Try: So, I wish everyone a Happy New Year!]

The are six exams coming up. During this holiday, I have to complete my homework and exercises. Even though I have no time to play, I enjoy myself and feeling good. Well, 2007 is coming after few days, I wish everyone "Happy New Year"

After two weeks,I will have six exams (so) I can't play computer (before the exams). In this (holiday),I have a lot of homework and (exercises to do).Although I (play),I (feel) very happy.After (a few) days,we will (reach) 2007.So I hope all the people (have a "Happy New Year").
I think that will be better

I will six exams in two week's time, therefore, I cannot play the computer. I will have a lot of homework and exercises during the upcoming holidays. Although I cannot play much, I am still very happy. We will step in to year 2007 after a few days and I would like to wish everyone "Happy New Year!"

I think this reads better this way.