Can you find my mistake?

2007-01-14 6:54 pm
Dancing is my habit.I like dacing because it can let my body become rhythmical and lithe.My best subject is scien.My favourite subject is English and Mandarin bacause English is international language.If I learn about it,I will connect with outlanders.Mandari is a popularity language in my country.Also,I can learn printed word in Mandarin so that I like it.At my leisure time,I either play badminton or surf the net.Sometimes,I would watch TV too.

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2007-01-14 7:08 pm
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i found u have some mistakes...let me try to correct it for u

Dancing is my hobby.I like dacing because this can train up my body to become more rhythmical and lithe.Science is the subject which I can do very well. While, my favourite subject is English and Mandarin. As English is an international language. If I learn this language well, I may be able to communicate with the foreigners.Mandarin is an universal language in my country. I can learn Mandarin's written language too. In my leisure time, I either play badminton or surf the net. I will be watching television when I am free too.


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2007-01-23 8:00 pm
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2007-01-14 8:00 pm
While my best subject is science, my favourite subjects are English and Mandarin. I like English because it is an international language and if I become good at it, I can communicate with people from around the world. Mandarin is the most common language of my country. I learn Mandarin in its spoken form as well as its written form.

Dancing is my favourite hobby. I like dancing because it makes me more rhythmical and flexible. In my spare time, I also like playing badminton or surf the Net. Sometimes, I watch a bit of TV, too.

Notes:

1. Don't use lithe, consider flexible.
2. The bit about dancing should be after your favourite subjects. It seems very out-of-place at the beginning of the essay.
3. Consider _spare time_ instead of _leisure time_.


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