請幫我看看英文resume這樣可以嗎？

你寫的內容其實混雜了英美求職文件的cover letter 和resume 兩者, 以下這三段屬於cover letter:

Dear Sir or Madam,

With reference to your advertisement in the 104 Human Resource Agency of January 2, 2007, I wish to apply the position in your company.

I’m twenty-five years old and single, and I wish to become a successful international trade person in society, because I’m a new learner need more experience of communicating and work among different type of people.

Thank you for your time and consideration.

其餘屬於resume.

求職雖然不妨加入創意, 不過以我來看, 覺得這篇綜合cover letter 和resume 的文件有下列幾個缺點:

1. 非標準格式, 對每天要處理成千上百份求職資料的HR 部門不容易很快看懂.
2. cover letter 部份:
a. cover letter 部分要包含四段, 用獨立的A4 紙書寫.
b. cover letter 你還少了以下兩段:
-第三段: 強調本身條件對這份工作的優勢.
-第四段: 徵求公司提供面試機會的文字
c. 第一段有關 "我在哪裡看到這個工作機會" 你有寫了.
d. 第二段有關 "我的簡單自我介紹", 你也有寫了.
3. Resume 部分更應該寫得完整, 由於你的工作經歷較少, 建議應該加上其他可供公司參考而瞭解你個人資格與特長的其他經歷, 例如社團經歷, 個人專長等. 光是Resume 部分, 建議要能填滿A4紙張一張.
4. 如果你要在台灣應徵, 建議仍附上台灣職場習慣的中文自傳一份
5. 如果你要應徵的是台商, 建議避免使用英美式的cover letter 與resume, 還是使用中文的履歷與自傳, 但英文履歷可以做附件, 如果你要強調你的英文能力的話.

2007-01-12 19:29:23 補充：
I look forward to hearing from you soon 才對. 這句跟Thanks for your time and consideration 沒有衝突, 可以都放, 不過這些都只是書信收尾的方法. 兩句誰放前誰放後都可以.

How to Write a Winning Rsum
如何寫一份致勝的履歷表
Tired of your job and looking for a new one? Or maybe you recently graduated from college and are looking for your first employment. The key to getting the job you want is your rsum. Here's how to write a winning one:
厭倦你現有的工作，想要換一份新工作嗎？或者你剛大學畢業正在找第一份工作。得到你想要之工作的關鍵在於你的履歷表。以下是如何寫一份致勝的履歷表：
1. Keep your rsum to only one page, two at most. Don't list everything you've ever done in your whole life. List only what is important and relates to the job you're applying for.
1.讓履歷表的內容維持在一頁，最多兩頁。不要列出你生命中所有做過的事，只需列舉重要及和你申請的工作有關的項目。
2. Your rsum should include:
2.你的履歷表應該包括：
A) Your name, address and phone number at the top of the page.
●你的名字、地址及電話。應該寫在表格上方。
B) Your educational background, beginning with your most recent school. Include the school's name, location, the dates you attended and the degree or certificate you received. List high school only if you didn't go to college.
●你的教育背景，從最高學歷的學校開始。包含學校名稱、地點、就讀日期，及獲得的文憑或證書。如果你沒有上大學才需要寫下高中資料。
C) Your work experience. Again, begin with the most recent. Include the name and location of each employer, as well as your job title and dates of employment.
●你的工作經驗。同樣地由最近期的工作開始。包括每一家雇主的名稱及地點，你的職稱及受雇日期。
3. Briefly describe your responsibilities at each job. Use short, active sentences. For example, "Supervised 12 sales clerks." Be specific. Don't just write, "Increased overseas sales." Instead, say, "Increased overseas sales by 20 percent." Also include any honors or awards you received.
3.簡略地描述每一份工作的職責。使用簡短有力的語句。例如，「管理十二位銷售人員」。務必要明確，不要只寫「增加國外銷售量」，而是「增加國外銷售量百分之二十」。另外也寫下獲得的任何榮譽或獎項。
4. Make your rsum easy to read. Put headings in bold. Also highlight in bold any special skills you have, or list them with bullets. Leave plenty of space between lines, too.
4.讓你的履歷表容易讀。標題使用粗字體，同樣地，你所有的特殊技能也用粗字體或圓點符號來加強標示。也要確定行距有足夠的空間。

2007-01-09 11:19:22 補充：
5. Use a laser printer to print your résumé. If an employer can't read it easily, he won't read it at all. Print your résumé on good quality paper, too. Avoid brightly colored paper. The employer is more interested in your résumé's content than its color.

2007-01-09 11:21:07 補充：
5.使用雷射印表機列印你的履歷表。如果雇主不能很容易地讀它，他絕對不會多看一眼的。將你的履歷表印在好的紙張上。避免用亮麗的彩色紙，雇主比較在意的是履歷表的內容而不是顏色。

2007-01-09 11:21:56 補充：
6. Proofread your résumé very carefully. Ask a friend to proofread it, too. No employer wants to hire someone who isn't careful to avoid mistakes.

6.仔細小心地校對你的履歷表。也找一個朋友幫忙校閱，沒有雇主會想雇用大意犯錯的人。

Happy job hunting!

祝你找工作順利！

第一個：姓名請用全名，例如：Ivy Huang
第二個：地址錯誤，應該是：No.92, Alley 37, Zhong-Zheng Road, Shinlin District, Taipei City, ROC
我是打士林區，請自行更正。
第三個：寫Mobile或cell phone number會比較適當。
第四個：在第一段的I wish...應該改為I would like to...比較適當。
第五個：在第二段的I wish to become a successful international trade person in society改為I would like to increase international trade experience and be successful會比較適當。
第六個：第二段的I'm a new learner need more experience...改為I'm a beginner needing more experience...
第七個：教育的Institute of Nan-Jeon Technology應該是Technology Institute of Nan-Jeon
第八個：改為I am a Bachelor of trade in business and major in international trade including how to compose letter of credit, economics and computer programs.
最後一個：請加上I look forward hearing from you soon.