改grammer, 最好改formal d, part 2

Like most young people, I always go shopping in Mong Kok, Tsim Sha Tsui and Causeway Bay. We shop often in these areas because the shops and restaurants are mainly targeting at youths with fashionable styles and reasonable prices. One of the major reason that we like to gather at those places, because it is close to the our school. I studied in a secondary school in Kwun Tong so I used to have dinner with my schoolmates at APM. However, I am attending an University in Sha Tin, so my colleagues and I always gather in New Town Plaza or Mong Kok.

some of the sentences are redundant to write out again...and i've changed the grammar n some vocabs~ hope this helps.

Should be "One of the major reasons"...."reasons " 在 "One of the" 之後要 + s

Mong Kok, Tsim Sha Tsui and Causeway Bay are the hot spots for teenage shoppers, I am no different than them. This is because the stores and restaurants there offer on-trend merchandises and services at affordable prices, which are the favor of the teens. Due to the location of my secondary school in Kwun Tong, I used to hang out with my classmates at APM, whereas, I now usually hang out in Mong Kok or New Town Plaza with my university classmates.

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Like many young people, I always shop in Mongkok, Tsim Sha Tsui, and Causeway Bay. We prefer to shop in such places as the shops, boutiques and restaurants provide products of an appropriate range of price, with style most suitable to us. Without doubt, this is the main reason why we are used to gathering in these locations. As the secondary school I attended is situated in Kwun Tong, I always dine with my colleagues at APM(what's that?). Now that I am studying in the Univerity in Sha Tin, my colleagues and I tend to meet in New Town Plaza, or Mongkok.

Some notes:
Mention why you go to these places - explain how the place you meet with your schoolmates changes accordingly to wherever you attend your schooling. You need to give reasons why it works this way.

Like most youth, I always shop in Mong Kok, Tsim Sha Tsui and Causeway Bay, because the shops and restaurants there are mainly targeting youth with the right style and reasonable price. Another reason we like to gather at those places, because it is close to the school I attend. I studied in a secondary school in Kwun Tong so we always have dinner with my secondary schoolmates at APM. Now, I am attending an Unversity in Sha Tin, so my University schoolmates and I always gather in New Town Plaza or Mong Kok.