請幫忙看看以下句子文法是否有錯?

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1. I have four family manbers.They are my parents and my brother.He is nice years old and he is in P.4.

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There are four member in my family.They are my parents and brother.He is nine years old .He is a primary4 student

錯誤
1 串錯nine
2 I have four family manbers係中國語文-我有四個....直譯的寫法so it's wrong
3 p.4係身分,唔係地方so no in add student
4 They are my parents and my brother個my不用重複

2. My favourite teacher is miss Tam,she is nice and she teaches me a lots of thing.I like her very much.

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My favourite teacher is miss Tam.She is nice and teaches me a lot of things.I like her very much.

錯誤
1 My favourite teacher is miss Tam.She is nice and teaches me a lot of things. must 兩句
2 a lot of 個lot唔洗s只有a lots先有
3thing這兒係眾數加s

3. My favourite book is The Magic Mirror.The anthor is Enid Blyton.This story is about a sad boy become a happy boy.

become change to became
story must be simple past tenes

1. My family has four members. They are my parents and my brother. My brother is nine years old and is in P.4.

2. My favourite teacher is Miss Tam. She is nice and teaches me many things. I like her very much.

3. My favourite book is "The Magic Mirror". The author is Enid Blyton.This story is about a sad boy changing to a happy boy.

1. I have four family 【manbers(是 mambers)】.They are my parents and my brother.He is【nice(歲數沒有nice)】years old and he is 【in P.4(是 a P.4 student)】.

2.My favourite teacher is miss Tam,she is nice and she teaches me a【 lots(是lot)of 【thing(是things)】.I like her very much.

3.My favourite book is The Magic Mirror.The【anthor(author)】is Enid Blyton.This story
【is(是was)】【加talk】 about a sad boy【become(became)】 a happy boy.

I have four family members, my parents, brother and I. my brother is nine years old and studying in P.4.

my favourite teacher is miss Tam who is a nice person and teaches me lots, I like her very much.

my favourite book is "The Magic Mirror", The anthor is Enid Blyton, and the story is talking about a sad boy how to become a happy boy.

1. I have four family members.They are my parents and my brother.My brother is nine years old and in P.4.

2. My favourite teacher is Miss Tam. She is nice. She teaches me a lot of thing.I love her very much.

3. My favourite book is The Magic Mirror.The anthor is Enid Blyton.This story is about a sad boy who became a happy boy.

should be:
1. I have four family members. They are my dad, mum, my little brother and me. My brother is nine years old and he is at year 4.

2. My favourite teacher is Miss Tam, she is mice and she teaches me lots of things. I like she very much.

3. My favourite book is "The Magic Mirror". The anthor of this book is ENid Blyton. The story is about a boy who were very sad to become a happy boy.

Gosh, you've made some horrible spelling mistakes:
I've retyped all your sentences. I hope they'll help. If you wish me to explain your gramatical misuses, please feel free to ask for it.
By the way, I've put the mistakes in capital letters so that you know what they are.

1. I have four family MEMBERS. They ar my parents and my brother (elder or younger?). He (who?) is NINE years old and he is in P.4.

2. My favourite teacher is Miss (pls use captial) Tam; she is nice and she teaches me a lot of things. I like her very much.

3. My favourite book is The Magic Mirror. The AUTHOR is Enid Blyton. This story is about a sad boy BECOMING a happy boy.

2006-12-31 23:24:29 補充：
As an answer you should have made sure that it is absolutely precise, especially when we are talking about such a small chunk of text. Yet you have still made some terrible mistakes which can be easily avoided.