可唔可以幫我睇下錯乜野 grammar??????

Today I played Truant at school (JAVA lesson), I like the JAVA lessons very much, but I played computer yesterday. Something funny: Jason called at noon, he asked me why I didn't call him and told him the JAVA lesson was cancelled by our head teacher...

I was so lucky today that I didn't have to go to school. Around 3 P.M. Szeman (my wife) sent me a SMS. She said she will leave school at 4:10 and to meet her at 5 P.M., but when I arrived at her building, I received her call. Unfortunately, she said she just left school and I cannot go to her home.

Then I went to the bookstore to read some books while waiting for my wife, should I buy some books to read? Then I met my wife and we went shopping together at Tai Po Market (Tai Po Centre), but she looked unhappy all day, and when she is unhappy, it makes me feel unhappy too...

Also her father called her back home at 7 P.M, so we went back to her home by taxi, and I had my dinner (McDonald's) alone....I went home after dinner.....

AT AROUND 3 P.M. Szeman (my wife) sent me AN SMS. She said she WOULD BE LEAVING HOME FOR SCHOOL at 4:10. SHE WANTED ME to meet her at 5pm, but when I arrived at her HOUSE, I received her call. SHE TOLD ME THAT SHE HAD LEFT HOME ALREADY so I COULD NOT go to her HOUSE.

K this might not make much sense but I tried!
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Today I played Truant at school ( Java Lesson), I love JAVA Lesson but I played computer very late yesterday. Something is funny, I received a call from Jason ( Or Jason's Call) at noon, he asked me why I didn't call him and tell him that the JAVA lesson was cancelled by our head teacher.....

I was so lucky that I didn't have to go to school today.At 3.00pm, Szeman ( My wife) sent me an SMS saying that she will leave school at 4:10 and she will meet me at 5.00 pm later on. but when I arrived at her house, I receiced he call. Unfortunately, she said she just left school and I cannot go to her house.

After that, I went to the bookstore to read some book whiles I was waiting for my wife, I really enjoyed reading bookd, and I think you'll know I ended up buying some books home. ( Not quiet sure what you meant by: do i buy some books to see? )
Then my wife got here and we when shopping together at Tai Po market ( Tai Po Centre), but she looked a bit sad all day, when she's unhappy, it makes me unhappy too...

My wifes 's father ( Always say the person's name, don't use pronouns cuz u don't know what HER refers to) called her back at 7.00 pm, so I called a taxi and took her home. After I took her home, I went to McDonalds for something to eat. I was all alone... After I finished, I headed back home.

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你是大學生???? 這遍文很不 make sense....Aren't you suppose to LIVE with your wife?

today i PLAYED truant FROM school (java lesson / class). i LIKED java lessons very much but i play WITH THE computer VERY LATE LAST NIGHT. Something funny HAPPENED. i received jason'S call at noon. he asked me why i DIDN"T call him and tell him THAT THE java lesson (class) was cancelled by our head teacher.

i was so LUCKY today BECAUSE i DIDN'T (HAVE TO) go to school
around 3pm., Szeman (my wife/ girlfriend?) sent me AN sms. she said she will leave school at 4:10 and ASKED me to meet her at 5pm. HOWEVER, when i arrived at her building, SHE CALLED and said THAT she just left school and THAT i cannot go TO HER PLACE.

SO then i went to the bookstore to READ some books WHILE WAITING FOR my wife. i really enjoy READING books. SHOULD i buy some books to READ?
AFTER THAT i met my wife and WENT shopping WITH HER at Tai Po Market (Tai Po Centre). she LOOKED unhappy THE WHOLE day. when she'S unhappy, it makes me unhappy, too.

Also her father called her and ASKED her to go home at 7pm. we went to her PLACE by taxi. SHE WENT HOME and i had my dinner (McDonald) alone. THEN I went home after dinner.

可唔可以幫我睇下錯乜野 grammar??????
Today i play truant form school (JAVA lesson), i like JAVA lesson very much but i played computer yesterday lately. Something funnys, i received Jason call at noon, he told me that why i not call him and told him JAVA lesson was cancelled by our head teacher........
Suggestion:
(Today, I played truant from a JAVA lesson. Although I like the lesson very much, I was too tired after staying up late yesterday with my computer. It was so funny that I received Jason's call in the afternoon, asking me why I didn't tell him that the JAVA lesson was cancelled by our panel teacher. )

重有
I was so luckly today that i am not go to school.
Around 3p.m , szeman(my wife)sent me a sms. she said she will leave school at 4:10 and met her at 5p.m, but when i arrived at her building ,then i received her call.UNfortunately,she said she just left school and i cannot go her home
補充時間：2006-11-18 02:49:16

Suggestion:
(I was so lucky today that I needed not go to school.
At around 3p.m , my wife, szeman, sent me a sms. telling me that she will leave school at 4:10pm and asking me to meet her at 5p.m. But when i arrived at her building, I received her call, telling me that she has just left school and i cannot go to her home.)


重有
And then i went to the bookstore to see some books to wait my wife, i really enjoy seeing books, do i buy some books to see?
then i met my wife and go shopping together at tai po market(tai po centre),but she look like unhappy all the day,when she unhappy, made me felt unhappy too...........
補充時間：2006-11-18 02:49:41

Suggestion:
Then, I went to a bookstore to read some books and wait for my wife. I really enjoyed reading books and I wonder if I should buy some to read.
Afterwards, I met my wife and went shopping with her together at tai po market(tai po centre). However, she seemed to be unhappy all the day long and when she was unhappy, I was unhappy too.

重有
Also her father called her back home at 7 p.m , then we went back her home by taxi , and i had my dinner (mc donald)alone.........after dinner, i went home.......

Suggestion:
(However, her father called her to get back at 7 p.m. Then, we went back to her home by taxi, and I dined alone at Mc Donald........ After dining, I went back home......

I had java lesson in school today, i was very exciting at JAVA lesson even though i felt tired after i played computer till late yesterday. Something interesting happened, i received Jason call at noon, he told me that why i did not call him and tell him that the teacher cancelled the java lesson........

I was so luckly today because i did not have school.
Around 3p.m , my wife,szeman, sent me a sms. she said she will leave school at 4:10 and tell me to meet her at 5p.m, but when i arrived at her building ,then i suddenly received her call. Unfortunately,she said she left school already, therefore, i could not go her house.

And then i went to the bookstore while i m waiting for my wife, i really enjoyed the time in the bookstore, i bought some books in the store.
then i met my wife and we went shopping together at tai po market(tai po centre),but i could tell she looked unhappy the entire time,when i saw this, i felt unhappy too........

finally her father called her to go back home at 7 p.m , then we took a taxi to get home, after that, i had my dinner at mc donald by myself.........after dinner, i went home.......

i only did the grammer mistakes and there were still something u can change in order to improve your writing skills, but i think your sentences were ok but try not to write in chinese english. That is the main problem u have rite now. Work Hard~!~!~! ^^