唔該大家幫我睇下我依篇野的英文文法有冇錯~~~唔該哂!!!

I [think] this story is so (感人).A bird [can] make two people [love] .But the woman have not [say] that she [loves] the man,but [when /] the man [was] [1] died[,]she was [begin] (後悔)[,]she [can't] do anything,[2][3]only [4]cry and her heart [was] broken.If I [can](改寫)the story,I [will] let them marry and the man will not die.The other adventages of this story [is][, /]it [is] not very difficult to read and [interesting].When l read this book,l [will] not [feel] [bored].

錯字
[ think ]---[ thought ] 文法錯誤
[ can ]---[ could ] 文法錯誤
[ love ]---[ loving ] 文法錯誤
[ say ]---[ said ] 文法錯誤
[ loves ]---[ loved ] 文法錯誤
[ was ]---[ have ] 文法錯誤
[ , ]---[ . ] 標點錯誤
[ begin ]---[ began ] 文法錯誤
[ , ]---[ . ] 標點錯誤
[ can't ]---[ couldn't ] 文法錯誤
[ was ]---[ has ] 文法錯誤
[ can ]---[ could ] 文法錯誤
[ will ]---[ would ] 文法錯誤
[ is ]---[ was ] 文法錯誤
[ is ]---[ was ] 文法錯誤
[ interesting ]---[ interest ] 文法錯誤
[ will ]---[ would ] 文法錯誤
[ feel ]---[ felt ] 文法錯誤
[ bored ]---[ bore ] 文法錯誤
漏字
[1]---[also]
[2]---[but]
[3]---[she]
[4]---know]
中文字
感人---heart-stirring
後悔---regret
改寫---rewrite

* [ n / ]=刪除
* 介紹=>introduce

I think this is a touching story. A bird can make two people fall in love.But the woman has not said that she love the man, when the man died, she just begin to regret what she've done.She can't do anything,but only cry.And her heart was broken.

If I can rewrite the story, I would let them marry and the man may not die. Another adventage of it is, that it will become more easier to read and more interesting. When I read this story, I will not feel bored again.

介紹了的英文:introduced(過去式),(現在式為)introduce.

2006-11-13 20:39:49 補充：
次次答親都有人答先過我....

2006-11-16 22:22:49 補充：
打字速度真快，在我還在打回答時，已交了出去…但我覺得自己的比較好。

我試試吧...
感人=TOUCHING
後悔=regret
改寫=CHANGE
仲有頭個幾句吾係應該用PAST TENSE咩?
同埋But the woman have not say that
But the woman HAD NOT SAID that
吾係應該係PP咩?
我吾知岩岩架...