英文文法岩唔岩? 結構完唔完整 ? 睇唔睇得明 !?

If I were you I will write like this:

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This is what she wrote in her diary on 7th of August 1943:

"Few weeks ago I started to write a story about something I made up entirely. I have enjoyed it so much that the paper of my writing started pilling up from my desk."

For the past two years Anne wrote diary everyday and night during the time when she was hiding in Holland with her family. Writing had become one of her habit and also her best interest especially during the war time.

This is what Anne wrote in her diary on the 7th of August, 1943:
"I started to write a story a few weeks ago, something I made up from the beginning to the end, and I have enjoyed it so much that the products of my pen are piling up."

When Anne and her family were hiding in Holland, she wrote diaries every night during this two-year period. Writing diaries became her habit and became her best friend during the war.

I would change it like this:


Here is what she wrote in her diary on the 7th of August,1943.
"A few weeks ago I started to write a story, something I made up from the beginning to the end. I've enjoyed it so much that the products of my pen are piling up."

She wrote diary every night for two years when she and her family were hiding in Holland. Writing diary became her habit and it was Anne's best friend in the war.

+the beginning to the ending
應該係唔可以第1個+ing ,第2個唔+

第2段,diary唔洗+s,are轉做were{因為你寫緊story,最好用past tense}
She wrote diary everday at night in this two-year period when she and her family were hiding in Holland.

tense應該冇問題架喇,應該者,,,唔肯定架,,sorry><"

She wrote diaries everyday?
你咁打= 她寫多本日記每一日
everyday 都唔洗加s
唔通你打
i eat lunchs everyday
i eat dinners everyday咩....
其他都好好,留意返d s 就得啦