寫成點呢呢段英文?

2006-10-27 10:14 am
我想問大家,覺得呢段英文寫得好唔好呢?100分滿分,有多少分?如有錯,錯0係邊度?

i has't attend PR lecture this morning.....
because i don't want see someone....
regret to chose this subject,if i know early she chose this sub too ......
therefore,lesson in PR pressure for me......poor


free time afternoon,
at first want to read to the notes,
but i saw a sheet of " fill colour picture "on the desk,
to got it finished....very crazy and low B lor...

at the evening China History..........

回答 (4)

2006-10-27 1:59 pm
✔ 最佳答案
Dude...frankly speaking there are lots of grammatical mistakes in your paragraphs and the whole essay does not really make any sense.
There are lots of junks in your paragraphs that can be deliberately omitted.
Try to make a plan before you start writing up your essay, and most importantly, do not write them up like you do in chinese.

Here is my suggestion:

I did not attend the PR lecture this morning because I did not feel like seeing someone in that class. I regret to have chosen this subject(or just use course) since she(try to explain who she is) is taking the same subject as me too. This lecture has become a pressure for me from now on.(or you want to say I do not like this lecture anymore?)

I was going to read some notes in my spare time in the afternoon. However, I ended up filling in colours for a picture I found on a desk. I finished filling in colours for the picture at my Chinese History lecture in the evening. That was really silly .............



Hope it helps
參考: myself
2006-10-27 5:19 pm
If you would like to improve your English, you may want to pay more attention at your grammar. Focus on subject-verb coordination as well as verb forms, when multiple verbs are used in succession. Reviewing tenses would also help.

For the first sentence, you need to remember that I is first person singular, and so the verb to have should take the form have, not has. The verb following to have needs to be in its past participle form, and so to attend becomes attended. Then if you look at the tense, since the event has already happened and does not lead to the current instant, using the past tense would be more appropriate. Combining the above, you get: I did not attend the lecture of my PR class this morning..

The second sentence is almost ok, except that it is in the wrong tense and you miss a "to" between the two verbs: because I did not want to see someone.

I regret that I have chosen this subject. I would not have selected the class had I known that she would choose the same class. (XXX It would be good for you to indicate who she is.)

Therefore, the PR class is now a pressure for me. (XXX I don't understand why it is a pressure for you simply because of her taking the same class. You should be paying attention to the lecturer or professor, not her.)

I had free time in the afternoon.
At first, I wanted to study my notes.
But then I saw a colouring sheet on the desk
and I decided to finish it. I felt that it was crazy as well as silly for me to have done that.

In the evening, I went to my Chinese History class...
2006-10-27 10:58 am
文化完全錯,無條理。太中文既英文,希望改左會make sense。

I didn't attend the PR lecture this morning because I didn't want to see someone. I regret to have chosen this subject as she has taken the same. I no longer enjoy the lecture.

I was about to read some notes in the afternoon, but I ended up drawing on a piece of paper at my desk.
2006-10-27 10:23 am
In fact, there are lots of grammatical mistakes in your dairy.
Look at the corrected version as follows:

I has not attended PR lecture this morning.....
because I do not want see someone....
regret to choose this subject,if i know early she choosed this subject too ......
therefore, PR lesson pressure much to me......poor

free time in the afternoon,
at first I want to read the notes,
but I saw a sheet of " fill colour picture "on the desk,
to get it finished....very crazy and low B lor...

at the evening I memorised China History..........

** Please pay much more attention to the "article", unless you're writting a piece of informal dairy. Also, take the "tenses" as well as "spelling" into account. ^^

2006-10-27 02:25:05 補充:
I'm really sorry!
參考: My onw suggestion!


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