Grammar 有冇please~!!

One day, I went to camp with my friends, and we played game on the mountain. I found a carpet while no one was with me at the time. The carpet was beautiful , and I liked it very much. Suddenly, I had an idea that I would slept on it. When I slept on it, it began to rise, I was amazed. I knew that it was a flying carpet,and I was so glad because I can go to different places easily.

2006-10-23 14:02:54 補充：
it should be I WENT TO CAMPING

One day, I went to camp with my friends, and we played game on the mountain. I found (a) carpet (while) it was no one with me (at) that time. The carpet was beautiful , (and) I liked it very much. Suddenly, I had an idea that I could (sleep) on it. When I slept on it, it (began to rise). I (was) amazed, (and) I knew that it (was) a flying carpet. I (was) so glad because I could (go) to different (places) easily.

2006-10-22 21:45:03 補充：
- Both (went to camp) and (went camping) are O.K.- (played games) is better than (played game). - Always use (rise) in active voice.

你想話有無錯???

我覺得錯的地方如下:

camp - a camp
in that time - at that time
game - some games
it was - there was
could slept - could sleep
could went - could go
(modal verb 後面一定係 present tense)