Grammar Checking, Please

2006-10-18 8:19 am
Everyone has work pressure, main concern is how to dealing with.
For me, I would like to do more outdoor activities to release work pressure.
If my health can be maintained in a good condition continuously, then I can devote myself to the company and help it make more profits.


Please correct all grammar mistakes for me, thanks!
更新1:

to tintin852, release pressure -> easy to concertrate on work mentally I think it is better not use the word "health" can you edit the sentences for me again? thanks

回答 (4)

2006-10-21 6:25 pm
✔ 最佳答案
Everyone has work pressure, and the main concern is how to deal with it. For an example, I would like to have more outdoor activities to express my pressure. If I could maintain a good/ constant condition, then I can provide my best to my company and contribute more profits.

I hope my answer can help, if you would like to correct it, feel free to do it!


參考: a college student in USA
2006-10-20 12:10 am
Many people endures great pressure in their daily life but do not know how to deal with it. As for me, I like to spend more time outdoors as it helps to release tension. In this way, I believe I can maintain my health at an optimum level to work more efficiently.
參考: me~~
2006-10-18 3:35 pm
Everyone has pressue at work, and the main concern is how to deal with it. For me, I like to do more outdoor activities to release the pressure. If I can maintain good health, I will then be able to devote myself to the company and help it generate more revenue.

Comments: I do not understand the correlation betwen your having a good health and being more devoted to your work. Healthiness does not imply or cause devotion :)
2006-10-18 8:26 am
Every worker has a certain extent of pressure, the main problem is how to deal with it. For myself, I would do some outdoor activities as a mean of relieving the pressure. If I can maintain a constant healthy body condition, I trust that I can assist the company to earn more profit.


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