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Hong Kong is a shopping paradise.

Currently women outnumber men.

Hong Kong is well-known for its fast pace, efficiency and variety.

Shops selling brand names products mushroom throughout central.

Hong Kong is also a city with a high population and pollution level.

Hong Kong people become less and less intolerant and like to criticize others on their tiny mistakes or flaws.

The use of mobile phones may lead to brain cancer.


If people in Hong Kong do not use mobile phones, the population will be less likely to suffer from brain cancer.


2006-10-17 22:16:57 補充：
drawback 是講事物的決點，人是用 flaws.outnumber 和 mushroom 都是 VERB。

currently women is overnumber than men(應該係are吾係is,因為係women)
hong kong is well-known for fast pace, efficiency and variety.(我各得應該係of吾係for)
hong kong people become less and less intolerant and like to critizie for others tiny mistakes or drawbacks.(如果無記錯既話..應該係becomes同likes,因為people好似係uncountable架)


我d grammer吾係好好`所以d錯處吾係好肯定`希望可以幫到你喇