幫我看看通不通順吧!~英文很嫩

2005-06-16 7:18 pm
My name is ***. I was born in Taitung. I am 21 years old. I grow up in a harmonious family. My parents are workers. My elder brother work in B1,that’s a pub in Taipei.
I study Electronic Engineering in the *** Institute of Technology . I am the second-grade student. My interest is PCB layout, so I want to study about this skill in the future.
In my free time, I enjoy going to the movies with my friends. In fact, I just enjoy doing anything with my friends. When I was sad, my friends always give me helps a lot.
I hope after two years, I will graduate smoothly from here. Then I can get what I want. Naturally I will make me substantial. I will certainly succeed.

回答 (3)

2005-06-16 7:43 pm
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Hi! My name is XXX, I'm 21 years old, and I grew up in a harmonious family in Taitung. Both my parents are working, and my elder brother is working in a Pub in Taipei. I'm still a 2nd year student major in Electronical Engineering at XXX Institute of Technology. I'm interested on PCB layout, and hoping to learn more about this skill in the future. I enjoy watching movies with my friends during my free time. In fact, I also enjoy being with my friends, coz they gave me a lot of encouragement when I'm sad. Finally, I will be graduating after 2 years, hoping by that time I could go on to my road to success in my career.
2005-06-16 11:33 pm
我覺得應該先介紹幾歲然後再說住哪 然後說住哪的時候應該稍微介紹一下那個地方的特色 然後說完成長的地方再說現在自己跟家人在幹嘛 我覺得啦@@
2005-06-16 7:23 pm
這個...
你有一個可能勉強算是缺點的地方...
如果翻成中文,會發現你的每一句都是以「我」來開頭,
如果一直「我怎樣怎樣」的句型重複,好像不太好。


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